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Okay, so if I understand the whole of this thread correctly, now you do review later novel chapters, correct? But only if they have less than four good reviews on them.

In which case, pretty please:

The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 11.1
The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 12.2
The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 13.1

My early chapters all have bookoo reviews on them, but the later ones are of course basically down to "out of the Green Room" which is cool but I always appreciate more feedback.

Genre: Fantasy/humor
Rating: E to 12+ (12+ for the occasional h-e-double-hockeysticks)
Pitch: Eighty-three-year-old Edna Fisher leaves the nursing home to fulfill her destiny as Chosen One and defeat the evil sorcerer Redway and his army of dragons.

Each chapter has an author's note to kind of let you know where we are in the story at this point. The chapters I picked out for my three requests are each in possession of two reviews, and the first two are specifically chapters that I sort of felt bad about when I posted them.




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@BlueAfrica - Yep, you've understood it exactly right! :D Warning - I might decide not to get to them before RevMo starts. (But I'm looking forward to reading them!)
We're all stories in the end.

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That's fine! Whenever you get to them. Thank you in advance!




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Hi there! I was hoping maybe you could give this short piece a read, I say short but it's just short of 3000 words.

Alice in the Stars
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=137108




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writers block pls help
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@kirishimaxbokuguo - Could you please link to the specific work you want reviewed rather than your entire portfolio? I don't review entire portfolios but would be happy to take a look at one or two works. Thank you.
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily




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Fluffs (part3)
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Seltas's first kill have at it I'd rather brutally honest then well not. As much feedback as possible please.




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@camusic - I'll be happy to review it, but the link says the work is set to private. This probably happened accidentally when you were editing it. Go to the editing page for your work, and at the bottom the middle button should say "publish." Click that button, and it'll publish it again so it's not set to private anymore and everyone can see it. Since you've already published the work once, it won't take any points to make it visible again.
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily




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I'd appreciate a review on this random chapter of mine: Cedar Ravine: 2.3.

It's not too far into the story, so hopefully, it won't be that difficult to understand...
:)
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Hi, I'd really appreciate it if you'd review a song for me.

Body

Thanks so much!
"We are, as a species, addicted to story. Even when the body goes to sleep, the mind stays up all night, telling itself stories" ~Jonathan Gottschall




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Hi Mea

The last article of mine that you reviewed and the changes that I made in it as a consequence of your review, remain my highest upvoted post on YWS.

So I'd really appreciate a review on something else I wrote ---

A chain breaks at its strongest

It'd help if you could also comment on the formatting, because I'm always changing that up in my writing.
thanks!




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Hey there Mea!

Wanted to ask if you could review either of these pieces please:

The Crew 1.1 --> First chapter of a pirate novel

past our due date --> A poem that was very random in doing.

Thanks so much!
name: key/string/perks
pronouns: she/her/hers and they/them/theirs


novel: dream-ish (camp novmo '25)




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Hi Mea!

I'd really appreciate it if you could review my short story — The Absurdity of hope
its final draft will possibly be an entry for a contest, and I'd be glad if you could comment on if the premise is relevant to the prompt (which is included at the end.) otherwise I'll write another one.

Thanks a lot!



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