Step Right This Way!

Disputatores- Chapter 1

Dying for some feedback on this one ^

Done with @artybirdy's and @ChocolateCello's!

I'm open again.

Please get this piece out of the Green Room! Colourful War

Hi, can you review this short poem for me please?

Endangered

Thanks in advance - P

Hey,

Looking to get a bit of feedback on the first part of the first chapter of my NaNo novel. I'm largely interested in making sure it "works" as a hook, and doesn't overwhelm the reader with information.

Thanks,
Disk

i really need your opinion on this one
Dececption - Chapter One - Words Betray

@DiskElemental - done!

@lawrence - Unfortunately, you have your chapter saved as a draft, so I can't see it. Please publish it so I can review it!

Deception - Chapter One - Words Betray

i sure hope this is it. thanks

I realize that my work is a bit different, emotional and personal. This should serve as a lesson to me not to write stuff when stuff is bad. Anyways I still would like a review for it. There is a touch of cursing but it's not too bad.
Thanks.
A Letter to Emotions

@ElizabethLovelace - I'll get to that this weekend, probably! Can you tell me what your purpose for writing the piece was? I think it'll help me review it more throughly.

This won't make much sense but...
-Basically I was trying to write about my life but not in the detached way I normally do. Usually I take a bunch of stuff from my life good and bad, and then create a character from it. I just wanted to write something from my own way for once.
-Also I'm bad when it comes to talking to people so this was an easy way to avoid having to talk to someone about my emotions.

-To sum all that nonsense up, my life has been bad lately and I wanted it to influence something besides depressing and traumatic novel characters.

Hello! I have read a couple of your reviews and I like how thorough they are. Can you please review my poem?

Things Which Are Seen

Thanks for your time

@Calliope3 - Done!

(Noting for myself - Elizabeth's is also done.)

Also, the front page has been updated. Please read before requesting!

Is there a limit to how many chapters can be requested? Because I've an ongoing story 16 chapters in and I'd appreciate insight on pretty much as many as you're willing to do!

If you're interested, here's the link to the start.

One thing to note is that Chapter 2 has reviews over your specified maximum but most of those were for an earlier, much shorter draft. Only the two more recent ones were for the updated version.

Thanks for your time.

@Costa - I'm iffy about accepting large numbers of novel chapters to review, just because it takes so much time. (Probably should have specified that in my first post).

But since it's summer for me now and I have time, how about I read your novel from the beginning, and begin giving you feedback at Chapter 9, the point where they're still in the Green Room? It'll probably take me a day to catch up, then I'll do 1-2 reviews a day.

(Also, I believe I actually have reviewed one of your chapters. I think it was during Review Day. )