Step Right This Way!

Sure thing but in the eventuality that you spot something glaringly wrong in the prior chapters, could you still hit me with a quick PM?

Beyond that, I'll gladly take whatever feedback you're willing to give.

And, yes, I remember you posting in one of them... don't know which, though! :p

Since you opened this back up, reviewing this would be great:

Absence makes the heart grow fonder

Thank you!

Could you please give me a long, critical review on one of my NaNo stories? profile/Dracula/portfolio/470967

I don't mean to be ungrateful, but most of the reviews I'm currently getting are short and very kind.... so not very helpful.

Would love some feedback on the first chapter of my story, In Real Life. It's under books. Thank you, thank you, thank you to all who respond!!

Done Dracula's and ceb21's. Request away!

Pleeeeease <3 hummingbird

I'd love it if you could review my novel Atana. It's a science fiction and I'm in love with it. I want someone to follow it and give helpful reviews without depressing me xD (still i want honesty but please don't tear my pride in the process of tearing apart my novel). Here's the link to the first chapter, though there are eight chapters on YWS.

marmalade

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I removed the link because I decided to republish Atana. I edited it so deeply that's it's practically new (I think). The plot's the same just a lot of the world is different. I'll edit this again and put the link here when I gather enough points to publish the first chapter. Please feel free to tear it to bits <3

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Atana: Chapter 1

Would like for you to review my, ahem, "description (I guess)" of a character. Would like advise on language, how to write him better...etc

Hey, mea. It'd be really good if you could review my short story if you have time. It's not very good, but I'd love to improve it with your help.
Thanks <3

@marmalade @shima @felidae - Thanks for requesting, guys! I'm definitely not ignoring these, it's just been an extremely busy week. I'll get to them all tomorrow when I'm finally off of school.

Heylo, you got time to review my first chapter? Here it is: Chapter 1

The story is based off a video game called ARK, basically a giant prehistoric island with tribes on it and dinosaurs that you tame, etc. When you read it (if you have time) please don't pay attention to the fact that it's off of a video game--it will just be a normal fiction adventure book if I finish it.

When(or if) you decide to review it I really want to know what emotions the reader feels coming off the words, if any. Also I'm worried that it might be too unclear, as I'm writing it first person and that always gets kinda tangled.

Anyway, please review this chapter and it agrees to all your conditions-- no mature content or any of that garbage, and it has some violence but it's only between her and an animal. If you decide to review this, thank you very much! If not, then I completely understand.

This is the Exordium to a low fantasy epic I am currently writing. I was wondering if you could take a look. The first three chapters, which occur ten years following the Exordium, are also posted, if you would also be interested in taking a look.

The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns

- Holden

Hi, I'm entering this short story in a contest so I need all the help I can get. Here's the link if you want to review it: Her Sun

Would like for you to review my "story"/letter - Letter to a dead girl.

BUMP because I apparently forgot to do this when I came back to YWS like 2 months ago.

I'm taking requests again! Since RevMo's starting soon, bring them on!