zohali93

Thank you so much. I actually posted this story up long ago and since then revised it. I just never bothered to re-post it again. I'm suprised you actually found ...

Write.more.soon. I liked it. :) I think there's a bit grammar mistakes. Nice dance seen. It's better than whati would have Written.let me give it a go*ahem* he saw her ...

I see.... Thanks for the review. :)

lol that 4 year old thing gets me every time. Thanks for the advice.I know my sentences can be to plain sometimes I'll work on it some more. Whats that ...

When you said a short story ...you weren't kidding. :)

Yea it is kinda like a summary. :)

Thanks! :D

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Thank youuuuu

sorry for mispellings and stuff. I couldn't correct my words without having to erase another...

Nope. It just need to be more realistic and clear and all of what yoda just pointed out. Try reading it in the perspective of someone who doesn't know what ...

Tahk you sooooooo much! :D

Finished!

Going to edit this soon. Possibly in morning. Sorry people about things I overlooked.