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Hehe!!! I thought this was fun. I don't like to over analyze things so this is short. But I loved the twist at the end... cute. I didn't see it ...

Okay, you need to think of a better layout. The content doesn't really matter here but don't have line lengths that vary that much! For example, I'd break up the ...

Umm... lovely? I think you spelled Eunuch wrong. Don't ask me how I would know that, and don't ask me how to spell it cuz I don't know. Good rhyming ...

Hehe! I love it! The randomimity... it's great. The Batter? It's just like huh? Then stopping a rolling mole... since when do moles roll? It's awesome FotN. :D

Cool. Nice imagery. These lines were cool: "Tying knots in golden thread The smile that I’m lying in Is glossed with my glittered lead" "Feel the folds of the silken ...

I liked this one too. I also read your other one. That one was good, enjoyed the imagery. Like a very happy and sunny day in a world with beautiful ...

I thought this was good. As everyone else has said, the content is great. A few misakes but you can fix them. A twist at the end. That surprised me. ...

OMG!!!! I'm in love with it. I love the rhymes. I just love it. It's awesome. I'm in complete and utter awe. It's beautiful. Plus I read it while a ...

I loved this. Wonderful imagery. I love imagery. My favorite line was this: "liquid muscles burning black lava flame," Awesome. I could totally see everything. You paint wonderful pictures in ...

This is really good.... Really good. Great imagry. I loved it. Sorry, I suck at critiques. But this is awesome. A tad long though, and the formatting is strange. Long ...

This is good. Interesting subject kinda creepy. Yeah, some of your rhythm was off and it was choppy. I suggest fixing that and a few of the rhyms maybe. Sorry ...

O.o Long for me. Good job though. I like your descriptions. I especially liked these lines: Étrange I have a feeling that the soap is washing nothing away. That I ...

Hehe! Yeah I must agree that this is awesome. Taps into your inner child though many of us here are still considered "children." Haha! Good take on the song. :D

Yeah that was cool. Although in that line is it supposed to be "worlds"? Or I thought it was a typo and should be "world." I dunno. Otherwise, great poem! ...

Yeah this was really good. I don't know what it's supposed to sound like (you never do unless the author reads it) but it played out like a little rap ...