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When the World Keeps Spinning Out of Control... (part 2)

by forest_ofthe_nightingale


When the world keeps spinning out of control,
You must know that you can request no troll
Because he has just thrown you about,
Maybe even stuffed you right full of trout,
And you have no choice in this matter
But to go visit the grand wise Batter.

For the Batter is usually better than a troll
When it comes to stopping a rolling mole...
Or rather you, when you have been thrown.
He will hand you a stick, though on a loan
And charge you the price of two shillings.
All I'll give you is luck in the billings.

Why you should request a Batter before you enlist my aid.


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Sat Jan 14, 2006 2:17 am



Yeah, no in-depth stuff here... but I know how easy it is to do that... I've done the same thing to other people like 5 million times.




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Sat Jan 14, 2006 12:51 am
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Hehe! I love it! The randomimity... it's great. The Batter? It's just like huh? Then stopping a rolling mole... since when do moles roll? It's awesome FotN. :D




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Fri Jan 13, 2006 10:13 pm
xanthan gum says...



oh yes haha i get it now
wow i feel stupid
us poets, looking too far into things

deep apologies. according to what you said, though, this is actually quite an accomplisment




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Fri Jan 13, 2006 8:46 pm



Ummm.... you missed the point... its supposed to be funny. Every line, I use a rhyming dictionary and I have to use the first word I see in that sentence... it's kinda fun actually.
A no, it's not an in-thing... unless I'm the only one in on it. :D




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Fri Jan 13, 2006 4:12 am
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yeah, I must agree--------Huh?

It did rhyme... I suppose it's an in-thing that I'm not included in. *weep.* *shrug*




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Fri Jan 13, 2006 2:46 am
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umm does this poem have a meaning? do the trolls and billings and such and such represent something? because if they did, i didn't get it. on top of that, the rhyme was...er...forced and lame. sorry to say. loved the vocabulary, though. don't search for words, okay? you don't have to all the time.





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