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Hey Megan =] I'm back! Nit-piks first; Sophie gets overexcited to easily. - Maybe you could add in a bit of a memory here. Something about how she got overexcited ...

Hey Megan =] Wow - this was good timing. I only just reviewed the first part lol So...nit-piks first; chubacka things form Star Wars. - 'form' should be 'from' I ...

Hey Megan =] I really enjoyed reading this. Your MC seems very witty and this made the piece fun to read. It kind of reminded me of The Georgia Nicholson ...

Hey =] Ooh! I like this. You know how rubbish I am at reviewing poetry and lyrics, so I won't even try to sound intelligent by critiquing this properly. So, ...

Hey =] This story was so sad :( I felt so sorry for Micah! I can't really find anything else to pick out that Lucyy hasn't already pointed out to ...

Hey =] Wow - I love your characters attitude. It's nice to see a character with real gusto. It makes you MC seem a lot more realistic. I'm intrigued to ...

Hey =] I'm here as promised! So...Music and Evi seemed to have pointed out nearly everything, so there isn't actually much I can say without repeating their words of advice. ...

Hey =] I thought I'd review this for ya' that laid, empty - I think 'laid' should be 'lay' "Why?" I questioned my brother, as if he were in front ...

Hey =] I agree with Music, in that this piece was wonderfully written. You truly are a brilliant writer. I loved the imagery that you used and the description was ...

Hey Pen =] I shall try and review this for ya'. I say try because I couldn't really find anything wrong with it. my ratty old Sketchers thumping like bass ...

Hey =] I'm back to review this part for ya' Nit-piks first; "Get off me!" I screamed, trying to wriggle out of the iron grasp of Jim. He just laughed. ...

Hey =] Thanks for the PM! I couldn't really find any mistakes at all, but that may be because I was so engrossed in the story :) I love how ...

Hey =] I just have to say first that the title of this story caught my attention straight away - good job! So - I'm not really going to nit-pik, ...

Hey =] Wow - I really liked it. Like Pippie said - I like the way that you started with dialogue. It made me more alert as to what was ...

Hey =] I'm back! So, I enjoyed reading this part too and I'm definitely interested in staying with this story. I want to know what part the key will play ...