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Thats awesome, even though its short its good. The shortest poem ever written was entitled "fleas" an it this was it: "Adam had 'em" thats a nice short poem

This was really good! Well done! It felt like I was reading a published article on Harry potter. I love how you end it too, its brilliant! Keep it up!

I really enjoyed it. I love the way you tie the 2nd line to the last line. Well done!

This was really good, I like how you explain where you would read Harry Potter. It was very cool how you brought in the characters too

This is well-written, its not a type of poetry that I read a lot of, but its well-written and I like the ending

This is well written, the image is awesome. I like how you ask the questions in the middle stanzas, and how you end the poem. Probably not my favorite poem, ...

I like the rhyming, and this is a very well done poem by only a 12 year old. I also love the image

Its a good poem, I like the image throughout. I also like the rhyming, and how you end the poem (the last stanza)

This is funny! Burger king is awesome! they probably have taken the Wendy's customers

This is well done! I especially like the lines "Earth, O Earth, why do you shatter, Let the blood of fam'lies splatter, Let the hearts of children stop, Meanwhile let ...

This is good, I would take out the word "For" in the last line, but overall well done

Good! In the line "Not a lonesome word escapes this" I would suggest clarifying "This" but the poem is well written

Good! I like the lines in the first stanza, "A labyrinth of a winding vine Yes,freedom is a state of mind" In the second stanza, I would remove the word ...

I like the line in the first stanza, "That the grief of yesterdays convulsions", and I love how you pose the questions in the last stanza

I like how you present both sides, and how you question your reader at the end