Critiquing Woes

This was quite a nice poem, but I am rather intrigued by your rhyming pattern. It seems strange to have AAB BCC, if this is indeed what thr rhyming pattern is and I haven't made any stupid mistakes. Any, that for one isreally nice, Iit lends a sort of symmetry to the work.
The only thing is: how is the sea kind. I realize it is more of a metaphorical thingy, but even then the sea is not kind. It is cold, wet and dangerous. This seemed to me to be the only thing any wrong with it, but it seems rather difficult to change to something else, so no worries on either account.
Yours in reviewing,
Take That You Fiend!

Thats awesome, even though its short its good. The shortest poem ever written was entitled "fleas" an it this was it: "Adam had 'em"
thats a nice short poem

Sorry. El mar is Spanish for "the sea".

I'm unaware as to the meaning of 'el mar', but this was short, snappy, and quite funny. You brightened my day my friend, good job.

I like it its very good.


Well, I don't meant to be rude,
But I've not been reviewed.
I think it's rather unfair.

It's quite a cause to despair.
Please, at least drop a star.
It's a kindness like el mar.


In this line I think you meant to say-Well, I don't mean to be rude,
I dont know If that's what you meant to right or not,
It might just be me but it would sound better like that

I can end your woes right now! Yay reviews!

Anyway, I don't think this was super serious, but even so, it could be improved upon. Don't break the stanza between couplets. It's confusing (it took me a while to realize that despair was supposed to rhyme with unfair, not star) and odd-looking. Just keep this as one block of six lines.

Secondly...kindness like the ocean? If you're going to put foreign words in, please make sure they make sense. Unless el mar means something else in another language (it's ocean in Spanish).

Overall, I think you got your point across well, but the rhyming was forced. Keep writing!