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Holy crap that was weird! I love it :) Nobodies come through. That should be 'Nobody's come through' Very, very good. Keep on writing my down the road buddy ;) ...

This is really mysterious. The one thing I don't like about it is the fact that you woke up three times. Like, if this was longer I'd not notice as ...

Hey there. The part to me that really sounds odd is: Deep underground the ground, Maybe it could be "Underneath the ground," or, "Under the ground" Also the lines are ...

This is a very beautiful poem. However, the lines are all over the place. Try your best, when writing, to look at these things; line size, flow, etc... It was ...

That was so funny! I loved the ending :) I liked the constant rhyming and such, really good. One word filled his mind, that word being FEED!So late one night ...

This is really nice, I liked it. You describe things really well. Every stanza connects, its really good. I hope you have a lot more like this up you sleeve, ...

YAY I WAS LEFT OUT. :) Now i shall leave you with the most disturbing thing ever. The dancing. Pink. Elephant! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH :elephant:

This is sweet. The tense is all over the place, the grammar is awful (sorry), and the story is just way too fast paced for me. This would be more ...

Really cool. Today, fish don’t swim. Today, birds don’t fly. And today, hearts don’t beat. Today, fish plunge into the pristine depths of oceans, ponds, and lakes. The sun bouncing ...

This is good, Tenyo. But, you barely have a hook, I struggled to finish this the first time I read it and didnt bother review. But then you asked me ...

This is really nice. It's short and sweet. One thing to be careful about its the size of each line, they vary a lot in this. But good work for ...

This is really good, Nutty. I liked the idea, the descriptions, and the voice. But again, what happened to her follower? Was the follower supposed to be the man she ...

This is really good, I like it. I recently went caving and you described everything perfectly. I also really like the part about the "Illuminating the calcium streaked walls and ...

Hi, i dont really get it, but i like it. You sre very creative, and this is quite different to any other poetry I've read. Good choice to put it ...

This is really cool, but short, so im going to push to reach 250 characters. I dont like the fact you started off rhyming and then started at the end. ...