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Hello again, Cspr :D She had two older brothers who watched scary movies she knew she shouldn’t watch and on them men morphed into wolves and women wore very little ...

Hey Dizzy! :D Happy belated YWS welcome! If you don't know how I review, I pick out every small little detail I can find and bug you about it until ...

Hey there Jalmoc :D Her eyes showed fear, but fascination at the sight. This should be reworded: Her eyes showed both fear and fascination at the sight. She couldn’t see ...

Heyo Blake :D I take it that this is just an excerpt of a longer work. So here are a few nitpicks: She couldn't bare to be away from him... ...

Heyo Stori! :D Some of what I say might seem unnecessary since my knowledge of Skyrim is limited to the small amount of it I've played and the hours of ...

Hey there Nike :D Since this is a rant and not really a literary work, I won't be critiquing your grammar or spelling and such. I'll just be judging you ...

Heyo Cspr :D First off, I'll shower you with my lovely nitpicks. I'd say that the first paragraph is a small info-dump, but at the same time I feel like ...

Hey Angel :D I have only a few nitpicks to share with you, which is surprising for someone like me ;) First, in the first paragraph; It had not been ...

Hey there Hannah, you wouldn't mind if I dropped a review here in the middle of our competition would you x) In the first paragraph; ... he worked in an ...

Hey there, Captain :D Normally, I'd pick out every small detail I find to fix, but there's just a bit too much here for me to cover. Okay that came ...

Hey there Hannah! The way I review is basically by me pointing out all your spelling and grammatical errors, followed by you punching your computer screen in a fit of ...

I know you're not done, but I thought I'd leave feedback just in case you wanted some anyway ;) In the first line, you should use millennia or millenniums, because ...

Hey GrenadeCatcher! (Wow it feels weird saying that.) Since you asked, I'll be happy to rip this piece to shreds. Small nitpick: ... seem to explain quite how she... That ...

Heyo Death :D You know what I'm hear for. But like always, I'm going to have to warn you, I haven't read the previous chapter, so if anything I tell ...

Hey there Auxiira :D Veeren here to review your work. Though I have to warn you, I haven't read the previous chapters, so if I happen to point something out ...