ultraviolet

Hi! Here to review as requested, though I am a tad late.... My mind's been off track a lot lately and I can't seem to concentrate. Sorry it's taken a ...

Here to review as requested! :) Red = Corrections Blue = Things I like Bold = Comments This late in the afternoon, the pier was scattered with people. Old men ...

Hi! Here to review as requested! :) OK, so I'll probably suck at this, but here are some things I've noticed: Words tumble out placing wounds where they hurt the ...

Here to review! Red = Corrections Blue = Things I like Bold = Comments James and Emily continued to be really nice to me, and I was happy to, after ...

Here to review! Red = Corrections Blue = Things I like Green = How I would reword it Bold = Comments My name is Lilla , and I have always ...

Looks like I'll be your reviewer this fine evening! :) 1. This is in no way long. It's not too short though, either. It's a nice length. 2. I like ...

Here to review as requested!! :) One thing first. Why did you put your story in quotes? It was unnecessary a kind of an eye sore. I'd suggest taking away ...

Here to review as requested!! :) One quick note first. Jokesters Threat and Deception are chapters in the same book, right? So the novel page should have the novel's title, ...

Here to review, Neep! (And yes, I did just call you Neep. :shock: ) Red = Corrections Blue = Things I like Bold = Comments Hiya! It's Nepo again! This ...

Hi! So, I really liked this! My only thing is how God acts. He seems short-tempered, controlling, and somewhat of a perve. No offense. But isn't he supposed to be ...

Looks like I'll be your reviewer for today! Red = Corrections Blue = Things I like Bold = Comments Young feet trotting towards the small iron gates. Big feet leading ...

Hey! I was going to review, but I didn't get all the way through. Not because it isn't good--it is--but because it would be really hard to review so much. ...

'Ello there! I'll be your reviewer for today. :mrgreen: Blue = Things I liked Red = Corrections Bold = Comments Slowly I sat up, holding my aching head. I felt ...

Hello! This is pretty good! My only thing is, would Elijah really tell a stranger--namely the nurse, Vivian--that he doesn't know why he puts up with Peter? Isn't that more ...

Hi again! Like the other chapters, I really like this! My only problem was the coach sounded a little flat, his speech. Make sure to keep it realistic. Normal people ...