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  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Crazy, Stupid, Brilliant

    I loved this movie. I thought it was great how Emma and Ryan's characters (I forgot the character names =) didn't have sex the first time. I also loved that ...

    Oct 2, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Chapter One (DRAFT)

    Here at request. :) I'll be marking all my corrections/comments in red. Sitting firmly like a Tudor Love this line. I'm guessing you're referring to the Tudors as in King ...

    Jul 29, 2010

  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General
    Re: Letters from the Front

    I'm sorry I don't have enough time to do a full critic, so I'll quickly point out the main things. I have just got to my post in Ypres. A ...

    Jun 21, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General
    Re: Charlotte's Hymn part 1

    I have a question, is this about a slave escaping? If so, I would choose a different plot. Slavery is the most used subject of books. That and vampires. If ...

    Jun 9, 2010

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: What Else Is There To Say About Hitler?

    I'm not a Jew hater or anything like that, but I find the subject of your poem rather interesting. :) D ays with "perfect" people filling the world, fill his ...

    Jun 9, 2010

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: To my friend Nathan a.k.a Nova

    He always talks but doesn't say alot. A lot is two words and also the most horrid adjective of all time. (My teacher taught me to hate 'a lot' in ...

    Jun 2, 2010

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Under the Moon

    This stocky yellow cab comes to a halt at the base of this concrete cage, eight staggering stories high and a Metra train wide, as my ears carry me inside ...

    Jun 2, 2010

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Nightmares (4 Haiku's)

    Yay! I love reviewing haiku's. :D so deliciously cosy. I'm not too sure how being cosy is delicious. It feels like that you just came up with a "comfort" word ...

    May 18, 2010

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: My Home

    Hello there, Forestqueen! I only have one little nit pick with your poem. Found only in Idaho and India This line would have more force if written like this- "Found ...

    May 12, 2010


  • With a title like "I Want to Write", I was expecting some immature, novice piece of work. (No offence to any novice who reads this, we all started off as ...

    May 12, 2010

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Drift Back To Land

    Very nice. :) I only have one little nit pick. Ripples as I dip in my hand, I think you should add "It" or some type of pronoun to the ...

    May 11, 2010

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: ode to my bed

    Hey ichigo! Very well done! Like Jasmine said above me ^^^^^, I love the type of poems that get you thinking it's a love poem (romantically speaking) and it turns ...

    Apr 2, 2010

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: White Horse (One-Shot)

    I think Alfreto covered just about everything. I admit, the story was slightly cliche, but it's based off a Taylor Swift song, so I guess it has to be. haha. ...

    Apr 1, 2010

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Our Parting

    Great poem, I can really relate to it at this time in my life. Now on to the critique- You ran, as to be aborted, That part sounded very forced, ...

    Mar 29, 2010

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: VERY old poem.

    Remember, when you post some of your work you need to review at least 3 (I think, correct me if I'm wrong) other people's work. That does sound very advanced ...

    Mar 5, 2010


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