ode to my bed

i really liked it
it was an interesting subject you talked about but to me you pulled it off just perfectly just perfectly
hope you keep writing so that i can continue to read your work

first of all, I have to ask: Is there a double meaning to this? Because it seems like it. If not for the title, and the little line at the bottom of the second stanza, I would have thought it a romantic poem. But I guess not.

I loved it! It was both unique and form-fitting. It showed emotion and gave me an idea of how you felt about your loving bed. Good job.

Love,
Fixed

This was very cool!

Hey ichigo! Very well done! Like Jasmine said above me ^^^^^, I love the type of poems that get you thinking it's a love poem (romantically speaking) and it turns out to be an inanimate object of some sort. Plus, I absolutely adore odes. (I think that's the plural form, correct me if I'm wrong.) There's nothing as far as I can see that you need to work on, so keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to reading anything else you post on here.

Have a great day! God Bless!

Hi,

I really enjoyed this. It flows nicely and I love how it seems like a love poem and turns unconventional at the end. The last stanza in particular was really great.

My only criticism is that; "A feeling that will not depart" sounds a little clunky.

Hope this helps,

Jas