Published May 30, 2010
Nathan
He writes his songs, of lust and cuddles.
He always talks but doesnt say alot.
Displays his happiness but not the sadness and troubles.
His status reigns true but has he lost the plot?
Nathan is a kettle, boiling to the brim.
He thinks and thinks but nothing lets loose.
What saves his soul?? Or course it's a little dye and trim.
He never gives a makeover to what's really him.
He goes by many names. Ellusive? I think so
He tries so hard, to portray his constant glee.
Please nathan stop keeping these emotions, running too and fro.
Sit down, let it out and have a cup of tea 
I haven't edited this. Haha oh well 
LOVEYA NATHE
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Greetings, NeverendingPages! I'm Firearris (Or Heather, if you prefer!), and I'll be your reviewer tonight.
For the most part I like this poem, except for one little thing. The 'He' at the start of a bunch of the lines is bugging me. It's repetitive and therefore annoying. Otherwise, I like it. You did good.
Keep it up and good luck.
~Heather
A lot is two words and also the most horrid adjective of all time. (My teacher taught me to hate 'a lot' in fourth grade, and it's stuck with me.) How about "He always talks but never says"?
No need for double question marks.
PLEASE edit something before posting on here, no one likes reading careless spelling and punctuation errors.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading it and thought it was sweet. I hope you have a great day!
-Tori
Aha, i do love you rhi.
So, so, very much...
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