tigeraye

Do you remember the feeling of total peace that you felt as you stared Instead of telling us about that peace, I think you could make us feel what peace ...

Hello. I don't usually review poetry because it's not my niche, but I'm running out of stories to look at so here goes nothing. This is an interesting concept, and ...

I think the main problem with this piece is organization. You put a ton of detail into everything, when you don't exactly need to. For example: Theodore stands shorter than ...

I love the sharp contrast between the imagery provided early-on and the true meaning of the story that the twist at the end provides. And it's a great twist, because ...

The concept here is interesting, and you definitely have a knack for writing immersive detail, as well as emotion. The last paragraph in particular is very powerful as you do ...

This is really, really good! The drama is really stimulating, and the calm intensity is completely riveting. I especially love the part where you tease us by having Aaron tell ...

I really like the start of the story -- using the military uniform as symbolism for Iro hating the lifestyle is quite intelligent. You have some nice, vivid description, and ...

There's definitely a certain atmosphere to this type of upbeat story that one could find enjoyable. I love the energy that your dialogue has. If anything else, your style of ...

To quote Steve Jobs's last words...oh wow, oh wow, oh wow. This chapter was just so inanely creepy. Brook finally describing her dream is such horrifyingly grotesque detail just to ...

He then brought out a white velvet box, now stained red -- stained with your blood. That's just scary. Your writing is tough to review because you just do so ...

It’s not a happy thought. It’s a response, and it’s true. You can’t think of an argument, haven’t since your father’s noise and the shattering of mugs against the kitchen ...

I found the concept of the story flawed to begin with. Since newer employees are paid less than long-term employees who will also have to be paid pension, usually it's ...

You shouldn't be so hard on yourself, so as far to call your own story garbage -- some of my personal favorites I've written were done the same way you ...

I have to say that I was taken aback by how mature this effort was... There's a shocking amount of confidence behind the narration, as well as a powerful voice ...

Wow...this is an incredible piece of writing. The description is so intense, gritty, immersive and imaginative, that it leaves me hard to believe that it's actually a first draft. All-in-all, ...