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Re: The nature of us
Wow, are you sure you don't write poetry? If not, you should. This is a really, really nice effort. Really crisp and interesting choices in imagery, very thought-provoking and emotionally ...
Feb 23, 2019 -
Re: Perfect
Hello, Overall, I like this poem. a lot The scattered form is interesting -- it's very chaotic and scrambled, yet at the same time the narrator's anguish really pulsates through ...
Feb 23, 2019 -
Re: Patterns
This is quite a bit different than the other poem you have posted to the side of the page, "Masks"...whereas "Masks" is wordy and insightful, this poem is about as ...
Feb 12, 2019 -
Re: maybe poetry could be
This is overall a really cool visual, and I like the idea at all. Reminds me of one of those posters hanging on the wall of an English classroom, or ...
Feb 11, 2019 -
Re: Elizabeth (#2)
Something about the form of this poem just throws me off, especially the form of the first half. I don't know why it's disjointed other than just for the sake ...
Feb 11, 2019 -
Re: thunderstorms
You have a nice sense of poetic form. The way the words are layered on the page is very poised and focused. Though its a simple centered-alignment, I think it ...
Feb 11, 2019 -
Re: Good Night-NaPow 6 (My Favorite one)
Hmm, I like this one a lot. Very simple but well done. Perhaps you can a bit more mindful of where you put your punctuation, just so that it flows ...
Apr 30, 2018 -
Re: Theatre
Two problems with this poem: A. You're telling and not showing. I wish the first stanza had the speaker show us what his strife feels like instead of just saying ...
Apr 30, 2018 -
Re: signing the escro papers
You do a nice job of capturing happiness mixed with sorrow. Overall a nice effort. Your biggest problem is that you include a lot of words that aren't really necessary. ...
Apr 26, 2018 -
Re: To Tell Tale Love
A pretty unique and interesting poem. Your use of the language is vivid and I think this poem is quite complete as it is. It's a masterpiece audibly, everything flows ...
Apr 26, 2018 -
Re: The Butchers' Den
First off I think the review below is fairly ********. The breadth of your vocabulary is quite astounding, and you shouldn't have to hide that just because the person below ...
Apr 25, 2018 -
Re: All Thou Eye
The Shakespearean influence is obvious (even without the "summer's end" line) and your style of writing is intriguing to read. But I think through the haze of your elevated language, ...
Apr 25, 2018 -
Re: The Crown Of Me-NaPow 1
I like this poem much more. You're great at conveying grief and angst, there's an anger in the speaker's voice that really shines through. I would play around with form ...
Apr 22, 2018 -
Re: Worlds Away From Us-NaPow 2
This poem doesn't quite hit the mark for me. I think it's because you're trying to describe this unknown world light years away from us, yet you use imagery from ...
Apr 22, 2018 -
Re: bittersweet
I think your poem could benefit quite a bit from playing around with form. Since this site's editor is terrible, what you could do is take a screenshot of a ...
Apr 22, 2018
