First off I think the review below is fairly ********. The breadth of your vocabulary is quite astounding, and you shouldn't have to hide that just because the person below me doesn't want to do a few google searches to keep up with your level.
Secondly I think your poem would benefit if you opened up a word processor and played around with form, putting the words in different places on the page to give certain words more emphasis. Poetry is just as visual as it is word choice, and you can do a lot more here than plain sentences. The editor on this website is fairly sucky, so I usually recommend just taking a picture of the document and just uploading that as the file.
You misspelled ecstasy. Don't know if you meant "butchers'" or "buthers'" is something I've never heard.
That about covers it.
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