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thirstyhand

  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: just longing...

    First off, I'd like to say that the shortness and simplicity of this poem is refreshing. You were pretty straightforward with it. However, I was confused about when you say ...

    Jul 21, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: New York

    I felt that this was a very descriptive work overall. However, at some points, such as the first paragraph, there seemed to be one too many metaphors/similes. Besides that, your ...

    Jul 10, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Mine

    If this poem were to be summed up into one word, it would be cute. It was an incredibly cute poem. I think it has to do with the fact ...

    Jul 9, 2012
  • Short Story » Other, General Re: Reaching Freedom

    My first reaction to this work was "wow". I actually felt the breeze, but that may be due to the fact that I am sitting directly below an air vent. ...

    Jul 9, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Narrative Re: Moondust

    I am confused about the prospect of this poem. There are many possibilities about what could be going on with the main character's father in this poem. 1) He is ...

    Jun 25, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Fireflies

    Hello, I am Tamara, and I would like to start off by telling you that I enjoyed this poem quite a bit. I do a lot of starring out the ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: The Nerd in the Back of the class

    First of all, I can tell that this is somewhat personal to you. This is why I was surprised that I was able to relate to it. I am the ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Humor, Realistic Re: The Call of Nature

    Oh my goodness. This poem really made me chuckle! This definitely ties in to the call of nature. So basically the bathroom was occupied, and nature called you. I think ...

    Jun 23, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: great-grandfather

    My first reaction to reading this was "wow". The clarity of this poem was incredible. I am not sure if I am able to give criticism to this! I think ...

    Jun 23, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: Locked Away

    I noticed that this poem is very brief, but if it possesses significant meaning for you personally, then the length does not matter. As far as criticism, I would suggest ...

    Jun 23, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: woman

    I almost see this poem as foreshadowing the life that the girl has ahead of her. Indeed, it is "just the beginning of all the pain a woman must feel." ...

    Jun 23, 2012


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