theironnovelist

How lovely. I can relate to this in every aspect. I have a kinda weak head and heart, and have been prone to migraines recently. My heart goes out to ...

First of all, why are you publishing this here? You flat-out told us you didn't write it... Young Writers' Society is a place for aspiring writers to share their OWN ...

Oh, depression. The evil, bottomless pit, a beast that had me on my knees for years. I love the way this is set up, and obviously you convey a clear ...

Something about your rhythm and rhyme (and slant-rhymes) really catches my ear! I love the way your first line was set apart from the rest of the poem, too. If ...

I like the end of this. I'm really a fan of the format for this. Nice flow and rhythm. Pretty to look at. A few suggestions: Turning into a symphony ...

I like the rhythm and the abstract feel of this poem. Is this a piece from a song or full set of lyrics you're working on? Lyrics are less...well, poetic, ...

You successfully made a very cliche topic entertaining and heartfelt in a poem. Congratulations! I don't have anything to say about rhythm, rhyme, or conventions. It was all great. Just ...

The title of this poem is quite deceiving. I was expecting some unprofessional stanzas about a pony... A pleasant surprise to read. I don't have anything much to say as ...

This is simply lovely! I think your format is great, and the language here is beautiful. Description is great. I love the symbolism of a rose- beautiful and dangerous. What ...

Aha! So things are beginning to wrap up clearly. I think this has been your best chapter yet. Well-paced, and a great story within a story. It's exciting and gripping. ...

A catching ending for readers. I get the time leap from Christmas break, but how did Cole get beat up? Was this from his last confrontation with (Riley?)? If not, ...

WOW i'm behind in this series. whoops. Ooh. conflict. Nice ending to the chapter. I'd still like to see less dialogue, or a lot more description. Really work on defining ...

well hello there x) You're still posting faster than me...darn you. Good competitor. Ima get straight into revisions: #1) Very first sentence. Run-on. "He winced from the slap and I ...

Hello there, Kelpies. I don't believe I'm familiar with your work. One thing stuck out to me above all: this needs stanzas. I like the way it's shaped, but you ...

what an adorable little poem here ^-^ Some suggestions: Don't capitalize everything. It's kind of the same with italics, they express something to be stressed, so if you use them ...