theironnovelist

hello there, SnazzyPencil :) I have to say, you're taking this criticism very well. I didn't think this was poorly written at all, really. This is a great children's poem; ...

greetings, RainbowPower! nice name by the way :) I loved this poem. I can tell you have experience, or are just naturally gifted, in writing ballads. This was lyrical, freely ...

hello, RavenMoonStone :) I must admit, I have not read the first chapter of this series. I hope that's alright. In any case, I can still review it! Your strong ...

hey there, irrelevant, and welcome to YWS! (I'm fairly new, too, but I'm here often and would be happy to help in any way possible.) Now to your piece! I ...

Hello there, ironnovelist to review your work ^-^ As a lover of poetry myself (and aspiring poet) I must begin with...wow. This is...beautiful. And violent. But that's okay. Cause I ...

WOAH. Awesome ending!! This totally changes things. I am SO looking forward to your next chapter! Still love Arthur. Still love Foxglove. :) Nothing I have to say about content. ...

hmmm... I'm beginning to become a fan of this series! You have a really good sense of voice; I feel attached to Foxglove, the narrator, now, which is a great ...

aww, Pendr! I remember this. Reviewing this is so different knowing where this poem comes from personally. :) Let me start off by saying you're grasping a good sense of ...

This is very beautifully written! A great exposition. It leaves the reader quite curious as to what Foxglove's adventure will be with the Banished, and who she will marry. (I ...

hello there :) I like the certain words you use in this poem, to start off. It flows nicely and freely, a bit free verse. Your stanzas are well-clumped, yet ...

wow! love it! it made me smile and kind of break inside at the same time. I, too, share the fear that books may die one day. So I absolutely ...

hi there :) This is a nice piece. Lots of meaning in a short amount, which is nice for the typical ADD reader (*cough* that's me). I like the fact ...

hello there! I just posted my first YWS poem a few days ago, so I know how intimidating that can be. :) (Oh, and just a note, I usually focus ...

hey! so another good chapter! I think, for the reader's sake, you may want to include slightly less dialogue in this one, or modify it somehow. But it still remains ...

I really liked this chapter! Your story is getting better every time! Still loving the dialogue. This time, I felt you did a particularly good job of helping the reader ...