thehobbitgangster

Thank you for all the positive comments!! @Blift I'm actually making a video for this song to upload to Youtube...eventually anyways. :)

Thanks for the reviews! I guess I just talked about the pen for a second because it went with buying school supplies and stuff. My friends and I actually have ...

Hey, thanks for the comments! I attempted to fix the punctuation problem and I think it's pretty much solved. So, hopefully that will end the whole run-in problems! And I ...

Thanks!

Thanks ya'll for the comments! I suppose I'll just have to live with the bridge for now, but don't be surprised if I edit it. @thegirlwholived, I wrote it... :)

You could probably post the play in the scripts section!

hey thanks again to everyone for reading this piece! I'm currently filming a music video for it. @spike71294, walking the plank is just way for suspenseful. :) By the way ...

Ha! I loved Dumbledore's line "Yes, I do go by that name." I thoroughly enjoyed your interpretation of what happened!!

I thought this was a very good poem. I got the metaphor and I really could feel the pain in sadness in it. Also, this had fantastic imagery in it!

Thanks Lava! You know I think I did originally put "who is", but changed it because I thought it was wrong. Thanks for the clarification and critique!

Hey! So I'd like to thank everyone for the positive comments. And for the comment about how "sinks" doesn't really fit that well, I sort of envisioned it being said ...

ha this is really funny! I'd sort of appreciate if you separated the verses from the chorus or put some of it in stanzas. That way it would be easier ...

Thank you all for such positive comments!! I really appreciate the feedback. By the way if you do want to hear what it sounds like, I have put a video ...

Hi!! So I have only one tiny problem with this poem and that is that some parts rhyme and some do not. I just recommend that you stick with one ...

This was really great. There are so many hidden messages in Alice in Wonderland and I think you pretty much summed them up in one poem. Good job!