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First of all, it is a very short poem, and in order for a short poem to work it has to have a clear point. But, however this I find, ...

I agree with wewinwelose. For me, the rhyme wasn' constant and it did sound pretty forced. Although it did end up giving the poem a natural rhythm which is good, ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D This is a good sentence but I think that you could think of a better word than good, it stops the ...

Hey :D This sure is an intersting subject xD. I think it is totally true, makes me think about when I lose my pencil :') Fail! You have hit the ...

Hey I am gonna review your work :D It might be short but thats the idea of a short story ;) Never start a sentence with and! It might work ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D There should be a commar after junior. Ethan a junior and Kevin and senior. You are talking about something different, so ...

I found this really long and draggy. It went a bit too far. But the content is really good, and you really thought about all aspects. Really well done! Just ...

Hey I am gonna review this piece :D First of all I have to say that Slipknot are an epic band! Many of you out there may think that Slipknot ...

Hey I'm going to review your work :D It's an exasperated sigh, not a Martin looked at me with a exasperated sigh, hands on hips, shaking his head. Kind of, ...

Hey this is good so far, but you have a few grammatical errors. I think it shoud be I sat outside after reading yet again another vampire book. I sat ...

Hey I am going to review your work. I think you should rephrase this to I was hope we could at least have been friends! I was hoping we could ...

Hey As everyone else has said this is really really offence to any other F.R.E.D poet contest entry but they have no chance of winning now. This flows really well, ...

Hello :) I am going to review your work. Firstly the title - I think it is really good, short, simple, and fits in well with the rest of the ...

Hey I am going to review your work. First thing I noticed it is really short for a there more too it or is this the real thing? I think ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D Nice starter, but it doesn't flow to well so I think you need to rephrase it a little, it doesn't flow ...