Maybe this isn't exactly an Epilogue.. I don't know but it's the end. Thanks for everyone who has stayed with the whole story and sorry I haven't posted in a while because school started and I never had any time.
As summer drew to a close, the air grew cool and crisp. We all returned to school. Anna and I were sophomores, Ethan a junior and Kevin and senior. Tristan would have been a senior, too. It wasn’t long before the leaves began to change and the world was transformed from luscious green into sharp oranges, reds and browns; until it was no longer warm enough to venture outside without a jacket.
Tristan’s funeral was the last time Kevin and I ever spoke. I think we both assumed that we were no longer together. At school it was as if we never knew each other, I generally avoided him and I think he did the same, simply because looking at each other meant remembering the pain we had both suffered that summer. The irreversible pain.
Anna sometimes asked about Kevin and I, and why we never spoke anymore. When she asked, I realized that she had no idea what really happened that summer between Tristan and me; that it had all happened behind the scenes. Kevin didn’t even know, not really. All he knew was what happened on that morning on the beach and that wasn’t even the half of it. I realized that no one knew besides myself and Tristan. Even with him gone this was our secret. I vowed then, never to tell.
Anna stopped wonder in November when her and Ethan broke up. Winter blew in fiercer than ever and our ties with the Mahoney family were broken; times were so different that it became hard to believe that summer had even happened, only by the constant emptiness inside of me was I reminded that it had.
New England faced one of the fiercest winters I had ever experienced, that year. The constant snow storms made us all pray for sun so when April rolled around and the skies finally cleared it was a cause for celebration.
The school year was ending and everyone was infected with spring fever, no one could focus on school work. Before any of us knew it, it was time for senior graduation.
I didn’t plan to go, even though all my friends were, because I knew it would be too hard. It was a beautiful day.
I stood in the back of the packed auditorium, behind rows and rows of families of the graduates dressed in their finest clothes.
Names were called and one by one the seniors lined up to received diplomas. Kevin shuffled onto the stage, looking humble and stunning at the same time before the crowd. He grinned at his family as his mother flashed pictures and then hurried off the stage.
The rest of the senior class followed behind and as they did I whispered Tristan’s name and closed my eyes so that maybe I could trick myself into thinking he was still there.
I don’t think I will ever know if I truly loved Tristan but for the rest of my life I questioned what love really was. That was the summer that changed my life and since then I haven’t been the same.
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Okay so I feel like the ending could be better. Does anyone have any suggestions because I'm drawing a total blank
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(Wipes tears out of my eyes) I have sat here for an hour and thirty minutes reading your whole story. I was only planning on reading one of the chapters, but then I realized that I had read some of this before. Then you gripped me into it and I couldn't stop reading. My feet are still asleep.
I only say that you had spelled some stuff wrong that could easily be fixed. Other than that this is perfect. I absolutely adore this and didn't see the twist with Tristen at the end. I was like no no no no, I am going to cry now, dang it. Then I was mad because something always happens to my favorite character. I don't really have any good criticism, just had to let you know that I loved it.
If you write anything else like this please let me know! I love your writing. I think this could very well be published.
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There should be a commar after junior.
You are talking about something different, so new paragraph!
This sentence sounds incomplete, maybe saying: never to tell a single living soul. [Just a suggestion]
The commar before that year makes it sound broken - stops the epilogue from flowing
It might work better without the first 'it'.
Other than the little nitpicks it is really good. Keep writing!