thedelphinater

I'm generally not one to really like rap and that sort of stuff, but I really liked this. Not only was it well written, but the message was awesome, and ...

No fair! How come you get to be so good at writing without even trying? Rawr! Ahem, sorry about that, though it was sincere and I hope it made you ...

This was awesome! I loved the rhythm and the rhyming and everything! A few little nitpicks however. Main thing I noticed was that at the beginning of each line, the ...

This was good, but needs some work. In one word: punctuation. It gets really hard to read and you need more than just the capitalization to separate your thoughts. The ...

I really loved this, but I'm gonna get the nitpicks out of the way first. For starters, the beginnings of each line need to be capitalized. So far the the ...

Aw, I really liked this. I can sort of relate, because me and my friends all have our own little issues, myself majorly included, and even though we piss each ...

This was good and I really liked the idea. However, you had a few issues with the rhyme, rhythm, and organization. The spacing and how you organized the stanzas was ...

This was good, but a little bit too wordy. A few sentences didn't make much sense to me: He was walking across a blood red barren, dreamlike pillars of crimson ...

I thought this was awesome! I loved the concept, though it did get a little confusing towards the end, with the constant repetition, but oh well, that might just be ...

Firstly, you're new (I think), so HI!!! Welcome! Hola! Howdy! Bonjour! (insert any other desired salutation here)! Getting back to your lyrics, not bad, but it needs work. I'm not ...

Hmm... uh... wait, don't tell me... OK, I give up, I've got nothing. No clue what the movie is, I think. Anyway, I thought this was good. You stuck to ...

Aw, that's sad about your friend. People are so stupid sometimes it drives me nuts. Anyway, your poem was really good. I found two little things that you might want ...

I liked the poem and I liked the concept. Good job! The rhythm and all that jazz was fine, or at least I thought so. My one little complaint would ...

So far as the title goes, it's not too bad, I've seen worse. I can't really help you there, because it's your song, and the title means whatever you want ...

Not bad. I liked that it wasn't your typical mushy love song, but more I really wish I didn't love you, but I do, and that makes me mad. It ...