thedelphinater

Oh my God... I don't even know what to say. This is so sad. To some level I feel your pain, because my parents got a divorce when I was ...

Aw, this was sad, yet strangely optimistic and sweet. Anyway, so far as plot and all that jazz goes, good job. Your spelling/punctuation/grammar was pretty good, except for a few ...

I apologize in advance, because this is a topic of much debate between my friends (which is the same group Pen mentioned, and yes, I'm one of the Atheists, and ...

'ello! I like it so far, though I do have a few little nitpicks/comments. My first nitpick is the names. To quote George Carlin, "What happened to Bob? Where did ...

Howdy! Your constant grammatically and spelling-ly correct poems are starting to irritate me Eliza. Can't you mess up on something just once? :P Anyway, though I sort of know what ...

This was good. I liked how it was this character that was dangerous and an animal, but knew that and tried to reason with/justify the less...God, I just lost the ...

Awesomeness!!! Anyway, so far as mechanics go: Unfeeling and unconscious To current’s tug and God’s call, Floating in and around myself, I rise, but maybe I fall? I don't think ...

This was good. A few little things however. Firstly, the beginning of each line needs to be capitalized. Secondly, you need more punctuation. You have some, but it needs a ...

Well, I'm probably not the best person to be reviewing this partially because I can't relate, but mostly because I hate romance and all that sappiness. This wasn't bad, I ...

Pretty good, except for a few little errors: If you feel rite I make you the light! "Rite" is supposed to be spelt "right." Rite is more in the sense ...

Not bad, but it needs some work. Like you said, the stanzas and flow need some work. Some of the phrasing and words choices were a bit awkward, so it ...

I thought this was really good, not just from a grammar/spelling/punctuation standpoint, but just the poem itself. Like, I can't put my finger on it, but I just really, really ...

Yay! Death Cab for Cutie! Sorry, they're one of my favorite bands, so I envy you for being able to see them live. Moving on to your writing, good job! ...

This was pretty good. I liked the plot so far, and I think I understand what's going on. A few little things I noticed though. So far as grammar goes,it ...

This was really good. Not only was the idea good, but so was the imagery, rhythm, spelling, structure, and grammar for the most parts. In one or two places you ...