thedelphinater

This was very good. It's dark, but it's not the typical sort of dark woe-is-me poetry you see on here. The only thing I noticed was the length of your ...

I have to agree with Jagged on the repetition and being more descriptive. It's very hard to get repetition to work right, and with a relatively short poem like this ...

This was good. Just a few little nitpicks. First is that you don't really need to label every verse, and I don't think you even really need to label the ...

This made me smile. It's nice to see something different every once in a while. Just a few little nit-picks. The first is capitalization, which is mainly me being kind ...

This was really very good. I really did love everything about it, from the actual structure to the imagery to the message behind it. I just have a few little ...

This was really good. I liked the idea behind it and the imagery, and I knew exactly what it was talking about. Just two little structural things I would suggest. ...

This was good. I liked the imagery and the haiku-ness (let's pretend that's a word...) of it. Just a few little nit-picks I have. First, I think moonlight is one ...

This was pretty good. I liked the descriptions and the idea and whatnot. You forgot about a few important structural things though. First off, punctuation. You need more of it. ...

This was cool. Something that normally would have made me go "Oh great, not another one" you managed to pull off (that was a compliment in case you don't get ...

I understand what you were trying convey here, I'm just not sure if you conveyed it properly. I think this might be better as... I'm not sure. Maybe in the ...

This was good. I liked the plot, though it was just a tad bit obvious. So far as mechanics go, the only things I really noticed were a few capitalization ...

Howdy! This is my first review in a while, so if it's kind of bad, I apologize. First order of business: the dreaded punctuation rant. Most people have too little ...

Hi there! This was actually really good considering it wasn't written about some guy you saw in Starbucks for all of five minutes. Do you really like him that much? ...

This was very good. I liked the descriptions and the emotion in it. I understood the family, as well as what Alex was going through. Two complaints though: Both she ...

This was good. Most of what I noticed so far as nit-picks go was already said. My only complaint would be when it goes from the past to the present, ...