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Re: A Final Intrusion
Hi there! I don't think I can do a full review, but I have a few comments. There is a lot of stumbling over words here. The capitalization and punctuation ...
Wed Feb 22, 2017 7:57 am -
Re: the lantern
Hey there! thecolorofthesky here for a short review! Let's jump in! Line I: This is short and simple, but I feel as if there is a stronger word than "old". ...
Sat Feb 18, 2017 7:04 pm -
Re: Life in Silence
Hey there! It's thecolorofthesky here to review your poem. To start, I appreciate the concept of this poem, but it seems like the ideas need to be synthesized. There are ...
Wed Feb 15, 2017 5:07 am -
Re: My Lady, My Sir
Hi there! thecolorofthesky here for a review your work! Stanza I: The word "mutter" seems out of place with the theme of your poem. Diction is a puissant element in ...
Wed Feb 15, 2017 4:42 am -
Re: Cardiac arrest
Hey Cas! I'm going to do a short review on your poem! I haven't been on in a while, but I love that you are getting out of the stiff ...
Sun Jan 01, 2017 7:51 am -
Re: Peroxide
I am not good at reviewing and in fact, have not done it in a while, but here we go. To start, I like the title. It's simple. You could ...
Sun Jan 01, 2017 6:57 am -
Re: Drum Major
Hey there! It's Sky here on this lovely evening! I haven't reviewed in a while, but here goes. This poem is quite short and lacks much depth, but it has ...
Fri Oct 28, 2016 7:06 am -
Re: The Power of Words
Hey there! Sky here with a review for your poem. Let's jump in! I like to read the poems in my head, then out loud, to find the flow. The ...
Wed Sep 07, 2016 12:56 am -
Re: I've been there.
Hello! It's Sky here to review your poem. Let's jump in! The structure of the poem is very long with all of the couplets. There is no imagery or strong ...
Fri Sep 02, 2016 10:59 pm -
Re: peculiar galaxies on the insides of my hollow bones.
Hey there! Short review for your lovely poem. First off, I love the style of the poem. The theme is amazing as well. Although it is brief, you say a ...
Sun Aug 28, 2016 11:52 pm -
Re: 2009-2015
Hey there! Sky here for a review in the last minutes of review day. To start, I really love the structure of this. The short lines in the last stanza ...
Sun Aug 28, 2016 11:43 pm -
Re: How a telephone must feel
Heyo! Happy Review Day! Let's get going! I agree with kog; you should focus on one or two jobs or characteristics of the phone. Maybe one for each stanza and ...
Sun Aug 28, 2016 6:05 pm -
Re: Black Flowers
Hey Audy! First off, I must say I'm sad that I couldn't participate in the last two poetry jams. Ah, so it goes. The poem is short and beautiful. Brief ...
Sun Aug 28, 2016 5:07 am -
Re: Night of Ethereal Pain
Heyo! It's thecolorofthesky on this fine review day. Let's get going! To start out, I think your mood for this is very rad. The way you executed it (no pun ...
Sun Aug 28, 2016 1:53 am -
Re: Paper Mache
Hello! Sky here with a short blurb of a review for you. I agree that it starts out devoid of emotion, tone, mood, etc. As I read on, the elements ...
Sat Aug 27, 2016 7:00 am
