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Well this made me chuckle! It reminded much of myself and many other children who initially observe and want to be like their parent, until they see they may not ...

I just read Night as well in class, and this really is spot on. I love the contrast of how the things around him around are bright, but how dark ...

What an interesting poem! As a lover of environmental science, I liked the topic. Now for the review: The first letter of each line as to be capitalized in a ...

Good job on this. I think you did very well in portraying the thoughts and feelings of the suicidal person. It also made me realize other thoughts of suicidal people ...

Well the first thing I must say is that you have very fancy vocabulary! And second of all, I really enjoy your writing style. Hmm, I'm not sure how to ...

Honestly, it was okay. It has some potential, but I feel that your word choice was sort of awkward and that the rhyming was forced, as if you had no ...

I must agree with Hudz. It is VERY creepy, but then again it's like a pretty sort of creepy, that's also fun at the same time (If that makes any ...

Well, the first thing I must say is that you have very lovely dreams! I also saw that contest, but when I though about my own dreams...oh gosh. Anyway, back ...

First of all, welcome to YWS!! Your story is pretty good so far, and there's only a few errors that I saw, so good job! Second, I see absolutely no ...

Wow, that was really short! Haha, but it was still really wonderful. I think you've captured a sense of mystery very well, and I can't wait to read more of ...

If you're describing "The Swan" in the Carnival of Animals by Saint Saens, then BRAVO! If that piece was to be interpreted into words, this would be exactly it. "The ...

A very pretty poem, I like it a lot. It's absolutely true and I bet A LOT of people can relate to that kind of stinging feeling. The rhythm was ...

Very pretty, and absolutely true! The only thing is that "God" should always be capitalized when it's his name! Oh wait, and since it's a poem, you should really write ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! Glad you could join us. =D (And) Yay! A music fan! I love music too, so naturally I was drawn to your title. I ...

Wow, this was really good! Hahaha, the ending made me laugh a little. I mean, triplets? That's very interesting, and I never saw it coming. Your poem flowed very well ...