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well, i noticed that you said you wanted to have this novel published and, good news: as far as i can see, this steps up to the mark. i think ...

erm, ok spiderman. the poem was good and it gave off a good message, i've got to sya though that the syllables were all over the place, i know you ...

hi, i really liked this prologue and i'm sure this will turn into an interesting story. one of my main concerns though is making sure you don't always tell the ...

wow, that really was a good piece of poetry. i liked the fact that you put loads of description into the work, and that really helped to enthisise the effect ...

hi megg, welcome to YWS. i'll be your reviewer today. well first off, i would say: do not use so much of the word 'fun' in the poem, i know ...

hi. a really good poem. a really good story to go with it. straight away the reader is drawn in by the title you have chosen, and you executed the ...

wow, this really was a good write. you used some exellent imagery and some really good words to describe what was happening. good use of the title. it somes up ...

Hi! not a bad poem, but not an amazing one either. the piece was missing something. like another reviewer said, it needed something to make it more interesting and not ...

to be honist, it was a little short; that's not always a bad thing, but in this case, i think you should expand on the poem. like another reviewer said, ...

very good, very enjoyable. i enjoyed reading this piece, it was a good way to start the story. i now want to hear more. the charcacters were very good and ...

quite a good story, it does have potential. there were four main problems i found with it though: 1: the king; he seems to be over the top with his ...

well, it looks like the start of a crazy story. the writing must have been good, because i could see everything that was happening, the girl screaming, the blood on ...

wow, a great write and what seems to be the start of a great story. i don't think there were any mistakes at all. i really do want to here ...

hi creativefreak, i'll be your reviewer today. really did like this one. especially the first five lines, i think they were my favorite. and the situation you talked about is ...

verry good poem, it was really in depth and created a horrific and believable picture. the best part for me, and i don't know why, was when you said and ...