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when you wrote: "She brought him into a maze of hallways," I don't think maze was the best word choice, since their last name is maze. In the same paragraph, ...

I think it is a good poem, though I think it could be longer. I love the line: Jump until you hit the sky. I feel that you could work ...

You probably should not have it be: A soft bed in a life of full of stress. You should take out the first "of." I like the poem a lot, ...

I like it, and I love the theme. In Life, you shouldn't have worthwhile two lines in a row. Also, in Time, there are some places where you need some ...

I feel stupid, but I don't know who Tristan and Isolde are. I agree with Belle that there seems to be rythm in some places, but absent in others. But ...

I like the poem and the mood of the poem. To make it more interesting, you could go into more detail about how "War rages on around you." You could ...

I like it. I get that you aren't capitalizing anything, but you still should put in apostraphies like im should be i'm and its should be it's. Also, its feels ...

I don't think: Bloom again when springtime brinkings makes complete sense, I think Bloom again WITH springtime brinkings makes more sense. I really do like the poem, though. I like ...

For the boy who lived TWO houses over. Not tow houses over. I really like this poem. It's nostalgic and mysterious at the same time. I think you could work ...

There's ALOT of grammer and spelling mistakes, and they were VERY distracting. You're sorta new, so I'll give you some slack, but please, in the future, edit before you post. ...

I think it's a little confusing, but that might be because I don't know that much about vampires. I don't think you should start the poem with "and". The way ...

I like it and I'm not even in calculas yet! It's very philosophical. I think that you could change the title though because the title you have makes it seem ...

I'm glad you continued to write the story. You're right, it doesn't matter if anyone else liked it. It only matters if you liked it and are proud of it. ...

You are about to be reviewed by a member of Team Yellow. I like this story, but I think you should break it into stanzas. Congrats on your grammer, I ...

I like the poem. I like the end. Oh please, just go. Go away. Love that. I think it would flow better if instead of Yours is the face that ...