I order you to have fun today,
Be happy and wild and crazy.
Jump until you hit the sky,
And even then keep jumping.
Don't frown, pout or scowl,
Just smile and have a good time.
You won't regret it I guarantee,
Having fun is the essence of life.
Dance, laugh, jump and sing,
Because today I insist you have fun!
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Hello,I am going to review your poem.
This poem to me actually reminded me of the other day when I was trying to get my friend to come out to a party etc.. so I can relate to the story. This poem makes the poet seem fun and wanting to help people out, so in a sense the poet is kind of complementing themselves. Although someone like me would only notice that. This poem is very well written etc. I did enjoy this very much!
Keep it up!
,WritingAway
I think it is a good poem, though I think it could be longer. I love the line: Jump until you hit the sky. I feel that you could work on the flow a little tiny bit more. I like the poem. Keep up the good work. I agree with Jasmine Hart that the first line draws you in.
What an optimistic piece you've got there! I can see the real happiness through the piece and it also put a smile on my face.
Hi,
Haha this was really great! It made me smile. Your tone is perfect. The final isolated couplet worked really well. I especially enjoyed the first line. It really drew me in. I also really loved:
"Don't frown, pout or scowl,
Just smile and have a good time.
You won't regret it I guarantee."
I loved the originality of this, and I think it will do what it sets out to do in making the reader happy. I wish I could offer some criticism but really I wouldn't change a thing.
A pleasure.
Jas