LIFE
Life is a precious gift,
And oh how some take it for granted!
Every breath we take,
Every step we make,
Is a privilege and blessing from above.
Do we ever think of that?
Do we stop and think that that blessing can be taken,
Just with a Word from Him?
But I am not saying to worry!
Don't dread on the feeling you might be taken away!
Just be glad that you are here each day.
Rejoice that you are able to breath wonderful air!
Your life here may be temporary,
But make it worthwhile.
Make it worthwhile until the day comes
When you will be Judged.
Where will you go?
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TIME
Oh how time goes by!
We never see it pass,
And yet it still does.
Why can't it stay in one place?
Can't it rest, for just a minute?
There is no rush in life...
Or is there?
The good times always seem to pass,
Ever so fast!
And the bad times,how dreadful!
They seem to be going on for a long time
And seem to stay in one spot.
Each second forward is our future.
And will we regret it?
Oh,I hope we won't.
And a second ago was our past.
Make each second,minute and hour
Count as how you will be remembered.
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I like it, and I love the theme. In Life, you shouldn't have worthwhile two lines in a row. Also, in Time, there are some places where you need some spaces. I like your signature, it's very funny. I've only read the first book in the Maximum Ride series, but my friend has ran all of them, and I plan on reading the rest. I love your double poem things, and I plan on reading more of them, too. PM me if you write another one. Great theme.
hey thanks lol ill try to change it soon
Hey! Life and Time, two of my most favorite topics ever! Though, I liked the Life poem better.
It just sounded a bit off. The word "saying" just doesn't fit in.I guess you could have tried writing it in a four-line paragraph, it'd give the feeling and the message out clearer (espically for the Time poem.) but its fine.
This line, from the Life poem:
Love this part! Try adding another line here and it'd be a perfect paragraph!
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So, other than that; Well done.
Would really like to hear more from you!
--Justtrying.