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hi, jules... okay, about this one: i think, i'm a little confused with this kind of approach. you know, how quickly the story shifts, and then it was four years ...

The young boy was shown into the Great Hall. Dressed in little more than rags, he stared about himself in wonder, craning his neck to gaze up at the soaring ...

hi.. would you mind if i arrange this? I want to die, I want to cry, to be closer to you. Every inch of my body is held down in ...

hi, selene.. the first paragraph, for me, reads well, but i think there are some sentences that got me off the hook. nevertheless, i think it's a good beginning. Forests ...

hi.. is it okay if i quote some things? The loss of what could have been i really don't understand what kind of loss it is.. Like northen lights no ...

hey, winter.. this is your first poem? that's nice then. but i think it will be okay for you if i cite some things, right?.okay here goes: first, i really ...

hi stardust.. i'm gonna tell you this: i really don't love twilight (okay, i like it, but i'm not an avid fan), but i love the way people make stories ...

hi hannah.. i really like it.. i mean, i love poetry with a lot of descriptions. okay, here i go **clicks** there! a gold star.. (you're welcome) :D :D :D ...

oh, idiotic boyfriend..are you pertaining to yourself? :lol: for me, it was fine.. and you used a-b-b-a kind of pattern, right, which i find quite hard. very well, i know ...

hello, vuzfek.. hhmm.. Spring Magic.. nice title you got there. okay, inspite some redondency, and some flosses, it was fine. i really like ton give you a gold star. i ...

hello alexbc101.. i have to agree with the other comments:it was absolutely nice, especially for a beginner. well, it's really hard to reminisce, especially if you've had lots of sad ...

hello threm. hhm.. except for some grammar flosses, this poem was really nice for me, like you've written it just the way how you exactly felt it. i think it's ...

hello, archer123.. Glass eyes and Ghosts..nice title.where'd you get it? actually, it was nice..building up suspense and mystery.though there are some errors, a few corrections and it will be fine. ...

hello bleeding rose.. i'm just checking things out.. may i ask why this was your chosen title?..i was just curious.. anyway it was nice, well-written..i love how you describe the ...

He sat at the opposite end of the couch, inhaling on his cigarette and playing with my cell phone. I watched him coyly, silently, nearly predatorily. For the last three ...