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This if very interesting, and good writing! I really enjoyed your explanation on what a ballerina really is, and this characters personal thoughts. The chapter is a bit slow, though, ...

Interesting start to a story! There are some grammatical errors that you may want to fix in editing. The poetry is at the beginning, but could use a little bit ...

Hey, just wanted to drop you a review after reading your chapter! I really enjoyed the beginning of this story. I have so many questions and am interested to keep ...

Excellent work! I was engaged through the whole story, and I definitely want to keep reading to find out what will happen next! I really liked at the beginning that ...

Very interesting, thanks for sharing. I find a disease like this in our modern day life a bit of a terrifying thought, and I think those are the kind of ...

I really appreciated the way you used "Roll the cotton down" to bring meaning and rhythm to the story. I think having even a bit more commonality throughout would tie ...

Thanks for sharing your story! I found the scene interesting, and I am curios as to where your story will go! For the first several paragraphs, before I knew the ...

Hi! Just stopped by to read your story and thought I would leave you a review. I honestly don't completely understand what is going on in this story. I feel ...

This was a very well written first chapter! It contained all the components I look for when I first start a new book: questions raised, interesting characters, and good rhythm ...

Wow, that was an intense way to begin a story and I thought it was excellent! Personally, I find language to be distasteful and unnecessary in a well written story. ...

Very interesting beginning to a story! I really enjoyed reading it, although I will agree with one of the other reviewers about the speed of the story going from slow ...

Hey! Just wanted to give you a friendly review! First of all, good work for putting in so much effort to write this draft! The first thing I noticed was ...

Wow, the suspense is so intense! You writing draws me in quickly and I have so many questions about what is going on in the story. I don't completely understand ...