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All helpful hints. But I think my problem with poetry is I just do what I feel like. I'm not so concerned with conventions or what sounds good. Which is ...

This is a WAY better poem than half the dramatic and cliched poems I see on here.

*brb crying* You're the best, thank you. :D

Cute. A rare moment when simplicity is super OK and heartbreak is perfectly cliched. *golf clap*

I thought about it, but I realized it changed it too much. Made it feel more like a salad instead of a single noodle. Wait, what?

I did want to focus in on "sadness" to juxtapose "happiness," but those are some very good ideas! Maybe I'll expand on that in the future... Thanks! And thanks for ...

I gatchoo, gurl. Definitely something I could of left in the oven a bit longer, just something I kinda whipped together. :D Another helpful review, as usual :P Thanks for ...

gah. I know the feel too well. Good job.

Um, OK, can you stop breaking my heart? Thanks. But seriously. I'm not going to review this. I'm going to rave on about this for a little while because I ...

Haha you're fine! Definitely some helpful comments.It'll help me clean it up a bit, and thanks for the kind words. :D

I think the repetition was for emphasis, I think it sort of showed us the significance of the setting. The subjects are sharing this intimate moment together under sheer ivory, ...

I'll agree with you on the commas because I can flat out say I didn't do any editing to this and in hind sight, I'm getting really annoyed by those ...

Hm. That's not what the poem's about at all actually, but as long as you liked it I guess.... haha

um ok i can't figure out the formatting, just imagine four-line stanzas. yay ok.

*gushing* thank you bunches. :] you are awesome.