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Thanks. I come from a predominately Jewish town and the event I was describing was an early Saturday morning last Spring. Jewish people often call there synagogue Temple. I also ...

Thanks. Ill take that into consideration. I appreciate the time and effort you took to write this.

Thanks. That was really sweet. I appreciate it.

Thank you. That means a lot.

This is amazing! Great. The feelings are really present and the reader can hear your emotions through the poem. However, I think that you could expand this even more and ...

thanks :D

I actually really like it as a prose poem, actually. Once you add punctuation, it sounds much better. I don't believe the line breaks really add anything to it. If ...

thanks

sure

Thanks! You just made my day!

thank you so much! I'm new to YMS so it means a lot to me!

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Wow! Really makes you think. However, I think you could add more to it by using your line breaks more effectively. For example: you asked him why he always whistled ...

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Wow! Really makes you think. However, I think you could add more to it by using your line breaks more effectively. For example: you asked him why he always whistled ...

Great! However, you messed up your rhyming scheme in the last four lines. Otherwise, I loved it. The rhymes did not seem forced and it really flowed. I also really ...