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Re: Alezrani Chapter 10
Hey, i'm not gonna lie i have only read this chapter i have never read any of your other work but i decided to read soemthing new for me and ...
Nov 12, 2011 -
Re: The War Not Won
i love this it's so deep :) i love the fact that the poem is written in a convosation “It’s cracking love, just like my heart.” I think this line ...
Nov 12, 2011 -
Re: Battle Of The Hopeless (Chapter 3)
Hello Again :) i want to start by saying sorry that it's took me so long to read this but i'm here now and late is better then never. I ...
Nov 4, 2011 -
Re: Battle Of The Hopeless (Prologue - 1)
I really like this chapter. It build suspense better then the other two chapter's and though, at first it was a little bit hard to follow, the idea of suspense ...
Oct 14, 2011 -
Re: You Lied To Me - Chapter 1
I like the initial idea but maybe there needs to be a little bit more substance. It's only the first chapter and it's left open, as though you don't actually ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: Fight Myself.
Hello, I'm going to start by saying I'm reviewing this from my phone so just post on my wall if my writing gets hideous and ill repost it on your ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Battle Of The Hopeless (Chapter 2)
Hey me again :) I'm reviewing the second chapter now :) Today is exactly one year, six months and two weeks that I’ve been in a coma. - i like ...
Oct 10, 2011 -
Re: Battle Of The Hopeless (Chapter 1)
The opening of this book is so gripping i love it :) I am going to start by saying that i am sorry i didn't read this yesterday i just ...
Oct 10, 2011 -
Re: You have to wake up!
I love how this poem makes the reader feel trapped in the scene. It's a really good poem but sometimes i think the point can be a little bit lost. ...
Oct 9, 2011 -
Re: Adam and Eve
i love the warning in this poem :) i also like that you have gone against what most teenagers would usually write about and made something religious and seemingly 'uncool' ...
Oct 8, 2011 -
Re: My last wish...
this is a good emotional poem but i would look at the rhyme scheme to improve it. The first stanza has the same rhyme through and that gives it a ...
Oct 8, 2011 -
Re: Black Pendragon Prologue
wow! that is so dramatic it's brilliant! i love the way the plot is let out the bag at the end and reader is left asking why? I think that ...
Oct 8, 2011 -
Re: Old Road of Regret
i like this poem but i can see why you and your friend took it different ways. It could relate to a person who has returned to a physical place ...
Oct 7, 2011 -
Re: One Single Little Teardrop
i love this poem. I think it shows what every girl goes through from one time to another. My life is complicated in a simple way, that is my favorite ...
Oct 7, 2011 -
Re: My Poem About Freedom
i found this poem a bit confusing. i understand that you are talking about how confusing freedom can be but i think there is further you could go with this. ...
Oct 7, 2011
