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"The balm that soothes the weary heart." Use a different word than balm. Make it more personal. Like, the toy, or pill. Or more abstract like, the dream, vien, something. ...

Try making "Manifest feathers are other." And "They rot..." into one line, it would be more powerful.

This is a good poem.

I disagree with part of the previous review. I think that the negative parts are in line with the beginning and flow into the end. The change is somewhat abrupt, ...

"Does that make the sun set a fruit or a vegetable?" Very funny.

Add an ellipsis after "Can i follow them" it will help the following line read better. I really like this poem. It's funny and well written.

Continue this poem.

To stoop to a level devoid of value, and split a union held together All for my own selfish desires and a will to fill in the void of insecurity[b] ...

It%u2019s very wrong, I responded She was happy, I am not To steal such a thing would be inhumane How could I justify to ravage youthful romance for myself Try ...

It's about being in a hopeless situation.

Built upon faceless hills, by nameless beasts, It grinds its claws on stone as on silence, it feasts; This line makes no sense to me. =[ Their twisted forms giving ...

I have a review for this but it won't let me post it. It's long.

This is a nice poem.

chest complained about a certain weightiness throat threw tantrums about something stuck in it head spun ‘round hands - tremorous, legs - joined skin screamed, feeling a burning sensation eyes ...

I want to write scientific poetry, so I looked at how a sociological survey is set up and wrote a poem about it.