shanan-cat

I said that I would review your post, so here i am. The spacing was really well put out, and the only thing that really bugged me was when use ...

ALEXANDRA!!! SPACING! SPACING! SPACING! What is wrong with you?!?! And you MUST capitilize ALL your "I"'s ! I know that you can do way better that this! It was a ...

Ok, let us get started. I'm not going t write a really long reply like the others, but I will comment. The following things were really well planned: -story line; ...

WOW!!! That was truly amazing! The rhyming was out of this world and the poem itself was very true indeed, although I think that you have continued a little more ...

Hi, "proks", I liked the idea of the story and really all the neat words that you came up with; like "petit" and so forth. lay out was good and ...

I try so fucking hard sometimes That I forget that I’m alive. [q]why do you use swearing? Its not really helping your poem you know. Standing on a ledge and ...

I have a few problems with your story: 1. there's no stiry line (like snoink said) 2. THERE ARE NO PARAGRAPHS. why? (hehehehehehehe!) :lol: you really need to rewrite this ...

[quote="FireArris"]There was a very peaceful town, the hills were covered with yellow, purple, blue, and red flowers that were always blooming. If someone was low on money, others would lend ...

Okay. That was a little weird, but good. You had a few spelling mistakes like gothgirl said but other than that it was interesting to read (although it was confusing) ...

It's me, and i am here to comment on your poem. There was one or two typos, and i had a little problem with your story line: 1. you didn't ...

I really like the idea, it's original and very amusing, although I thought that the begining was a bit rough. I think that you were to fix a little and ...

I'm sorry alex but it's not very good. What you didn't do was get the reader to feel what you were feeling. In other words, there was no feeling to ...

hey em's! I finally got to see your post! Yay for me! O.k, for one, does this have to do with the school volleyball or no? The continuation of this, ...