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Hi Pompadour, I'd like like to say that I haven't read any of the previous chapters and I'm entering in blind. This is somewhat desirable, actually, as many people will ...

Swordsman, We meet again! :) Well, it looks like some other things happened in prior chapters, so once again I'm entering blind. That said, critique sandwich time. 1. What did ...

Hi Lozrent, I'd like like to say that I haven't read any of the previous chapters and I'm entering in blind. This is somewhat desirable, actually, as many people will ...

Hi Decco, I'd like like to say that I haven't read any of the previous chapters and I'm entering in blind. This is somewhat desirable, actually, as many people will ...

Hi tgirly, I'd like like to say that I haven't read any of the previous chapters and I'm entering in blind. This is somewhat desirable, actually, as many people will ...

Hi Swordsman 6X, I'd like to say that I haven't read any of the previous chapters and I'm entering in blind. This is somewhat desirable, actually, as many people will ...

Hi CleverClogs, Critique sandwich time. 1. What did I like about this piece? > It flowed quite well. It was honest and discussed the dichotomy of your life online versus ...

Rubric!!! Really!!! I only just decided to log back on and I find you posting here and there too? Did something call you back or have you been here the ...

Hi Void, I'm Jai, nice to meet you ^^ Critique sandwhich time. 1. What did I like about this piece? > Your story telling ability is great. You sometimes are ...

Hi Cabudolc, I'm Jai, nice to meet you ^^ Critique sandwich time. 1. What did I like about this piece? > You have a good grasp of sentence structure and ...

Hiya! Just passing by. Hope my review can be of some use ^^ First off, I'd like to say I was intrigued by the idea of a diary. I enjoy ...

Heya, I'm here to review your work for Review Day. I haven't been following your series, so please keep that in mind. Realism: The whole time I was reading your ...

Howdy. I'm here to review your work for Review Day. Now, I can't remember which previous chapter I had a crack at, but this one is much better. Would it ...

Hi, I'm reviewing your work for Review Day. I haven't been following your series and I know nothing about it, so pretend I'm someone in a book store, checking out ...

I couldn't find anything particularly wrong with this. It was nice, smooth writing. More on the "telling" side of writing instead of "showing"; you brush upon things occurring around the ...