sapphirewednesday

Jeff, this is a great work. I feel there are certain places where you could have more punctuation, but of course it is your creative vision. The tone in this ...

I like it! The thing you say sound like you've really experienced it, when you wrote it on the plane. The only thing I can say, when you said kick ...

I liked the emotion behind it, I liked the idea, I know your dad probably loved it, but it could use a lot of work. The rhymes in it are ...

I dont understand, shells are used for protection, and if your soul shattered that many times, then it wouldn't have protection. That's the only part I found to be wrong. ...

That was so sad, and unexpected. And if that was real........ im really sorry for your loss. Really great, really passionfilled thank you sooooooo much for sharing. :)

Short poems are my favorite. Especially ones like this. They're short, sweet, to the point. You don't have to waist your time reading a long poem that would essentially say ...

Hands shaking Lips slightly quivering We talked. But this wasn't just a talk No. This wasn't a lets try to fix this talk. This was a 'Can we talk?' talk. ...

I think it was too long and got a bit boring after a while. I know I'm not really part of your "audience" because I'm not all Christian, but I ...

This poem is really funny and extremely catchy!! The rhythm is great and I can hear the voice in my head. Really great job! :) No criticism here! :)

I like the idea behind it, but the poem is lacking stanzas, and flow. I like the last two lines the best, very good metaphor. :) Keep writing, write from ...

This poem is alright. I feel like your poem could be better if you expanded upon your concept. Sometimes the hardest part about writing a poem is the idea behind ...

I like the idea behind it. I feel like over all it's a bit too long. I know what you're going through though, and in that way it is very ...

I really liked it! I like haikus because of the simplicity involved, though usually they are meant for nature. I actually have written many emotional haikus like this one, but ...

Sorry, but I really don't like this at all. It's very simple and seems like a 6 year old wrote it. I only say that because there aren't enough details ...

I refuse to be another girl, someone just for pleasure. I'm tired of you, I'll find someone new; who's love you can't measure. I feel like the rhymes here were ...