Rosemary
Until my life is gone and o'er
These words from my soul forever will pour
A girl that I loved long years ago
The pain of her loss filled me with woe
Rosemary and Me
Wished to be free
Free to live and free to love
Like a flying mourning dove
Rosemary is gone. She'll never return
My poor faded soul, forever, will burn
I wish my heart could be free once more
I wish I could find someone else to adore
If I knew then what I know now
I could have avoided this fate, somehow
I am no prophet; I’m merely a fool
I’ve had and I’ve lost such a valuable jewel
Alone in the dark, I call out her name
Her wandering ghost will never be tame
I try, try again -try to forget
I awake every night in cold pools of sweat
I’ve wondered aloud, many a time
If this world has reason or bittersweet rhyme
Does this life have meaning- or is it a game
Is there honor in death - or is it just the same
Rosemary's scent was airy and sweet
Her soft gentle smile always a treat
Her laughter was music, the chorus her soul
Each day away was endless and dull
Rosemary's voice – a melodious tone
Her shining gray eyes could turn you to stone
Because Rosemary's will call out no more,
These words from my soul will continue to pour.
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Jeff, this is a great work. I feel there are certain places where you could have more punctuation, but of course it is your creative vision.
The tone in this poem is very sincere and, as you said, I believe this is one of the best works I´ve read of yours.
I believe that there are points that this poem can get a bit redundant, but it is absolutely your judgement whether or not that´s your style, and what you were going for.
I think everyone can relate to some type of failed and tragic relationship in their life that will make them thoroughly enjoy this particular poem.
Thanks for writing, this is a great poem!