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I really liked this. With most poetry I have to comment about the flow of the poem. But in this case it was fairly descent. I love how stuck up the character is, it sort of makes me want to slap them. Like, hey, if you don't like me you're an idiot. It sort of drives me nuts. I dont know if that was your intended effect, but thats how it made me feel. But anyway, overall a descent piece and I'm glad that you successfully used FLOW. So thanks =] Great work.

Also nothing like I expected, but I loved reading it. You can really imagine the man saying this and also the expression on the woman's face! Especially love the last verse, it's hilarious. Just thought I'd post to say how your poem made me laugh. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks!

Thank you very much for the reviews. And to those who were asking, yes, this is a humor piece. No girl in her right mind would accept someone this absurd. Although, admit it boys, you think like this sometimes.

I seriously kept rereading this because I swear that this is Shakespeare writing it or something. Trully amazing. Kepp up the good work =]

Hi.. I just wanna say that your poem is very nice.. the rhyme was very smooth so it flowed very easily..
Good work.. Keep it up..
Harshita:)

Wow. I really enjoyed reading this poem. I smiled from beginning to end. The second time I read it I even applied a British accent so it was just funnier.

I honestly do not have anything to complain about, it was awesome =).

I agree with VEE. It shows that the speaker is vain and conceited. It's all looks. There's no personality. I personally didn't like it. But, yes, it was different than I expected, and your writing is very good. ;D

--Skis

Haha, I imagine the aftermath, she shows him the poem and goes, "and you wonder why I rejected you!! Selfish son of a-" hahahaha. This was thoroughly entertaining. Nothing like I expected. But billiant. Congrats on the featuring.

This poem is really funny and extremely catchy!! The rhythm is great and I can hear the voice in my head. Really great job! No criticism here!

Wow, I love this. It's emotional and beautiful

I really enjoyed reading this piece. Write more like this.

Keep Writing!

Nike

Konnichiwa~

Ok I really absolutely loved this poem. Odd right? Usually I'm not a poetry reviewer since I just love reading them and can never say I liked this because or I didn't like this and such is. Anyways I wanted to point out you did well with this...a few things I picked out that made me read it over a couple of times but its all good. lol.

It's softer than your hands.

Well, I say rejecting me

Hello there. I've only got two nitpicks for you:

How dare you say I am not fit
To love someone like you?
Is there a vital thing I’ve missed
A thing I did not do?

It's softer than your hands.

Wow I love this great job!!!

Thank you everyone.

Ah, Volt, you break my heart. It's my birthday today, my friend, please want me?:)

Yes. Yes I am.

I liked this! I am not sure if it was meant to be humorous, but especially this stanza...

Why! My skin is of the finest silk,
The softest in the land!
I think that I may even say;
It's softer than your hands.

...made me laugh. This overall poem amused me, and was quite a short, somewhat simple, yet a funny and witty piece. Good job!

.....you only need 6 likes and 3 comments to be featured? O.o

But yeah, this was excellent. I especially liked...... all of it.

Is there a vital thing I’ve missed
A thing I did not do?

Yet#FF0000 ">, you refuse a treasure trove#FF0000 ">,

Bewail my leaving form,

Well, I say rejecting me
Displays your lack of wit.

--- wow! I definitely like this poem! Really explains well what a man would sometimes think when they get rejected.



-- speechless, speechless, speechless...

I really liked it! I is showing who you are and you aren't changing for someone, and/or you can't change for someone. Keep writing I really enjoyed that poem, I loved the flow of the pattern, and how it elegantly flowed. Kep writing, cause your awesome at it!

Hey there, Pervy here! I enjoyed this poem, and there's nothing too exceptional that I could say of it. It was cheerful to read, which is always fun. Now, for the miniscule "critique(?)" there was this one part:

"Why! My skin is of the finest silk,
The softest in the land!
I think that I may even say;
They're softer than your hands."

I'm not sure about using a plural for speaking about your own skin (Do correct me if I'm wrong). "It's softer than..."

Anyways, aside from that minor detail that caught my eye, this was overall sound.

Keep up the good work!

-Pervy

I can honestly say I really enjoyed this poem. I can't complain about anything and just felt I should comment to tell you how much I liked it.
And if I may put my input on the situation I would like to say that whoever rejected you deserves to be given this poem to realize plain as day what they missed. And I also must say that your writing is amazing. (:
-Hayley