rwgbookwriter

’m assuming that it’s some kind of Pokemon fan-fiction? Well if it is, then there’s probably a reason for why I don’t understand so much of this story . . ...

It really works at driving the point home and you can't seem to get those repeated lines out of your head, its really cool! While I enjoyed the subtle complexity ...

Your voice certainly made this an enjoyable read, even if there wasn't any discernible or logical plot. I can't decide whether this should be labelled as a postmodernist experiment or ...

First off you have created an incredibly eerie poem...I like that A few corrections I have are to remember your punctuation at the end of lines (for example the end ...

I felt inspired and uplifted to improve my own writing by readingy the message. The message here was clear, which is always imperative. Now to dive in-this poem is full ...

he flow is broken once again here. Why say you're a puppet when you haven't actually foreshadowed hints about that from the rest of the stanzas? I think that line ...

The ending was good and suspenseful, I like that you ended it with a question. I like the fact that you told us more about Melvin and what his life ...

I really like this! The description is brilliant- it really puts some vivid images in my head. I like the fact you wrote it in the 2nd person; it gives ...

SCHADENFREUDE! this story is very almost SCHADENFREUDE, we think, my precious. We loveses the schadenfreude in this, Precious. We loveses it. We loveses how he watches his friend die and ...

Hi, this is a great poem however I feel that it needs a bit more depth. You could do this by expressing more your emotions. I love the way you ...

The yubster is here again to review another terrific piece of poetry, and this one caught my attention. I won't be too hard on you today therealme, but I will ...

I'd normally sit here and list all of the nitpicks I can find in a piece, and then conclude by stating my general opinion on what I've just read. In ...

A good little story and some parts of it even sound poetical. Maybe that's just because some words rhyme, but I think it gives it a nice flow and creates ...

I can relate to having trust issues. I feel like I've been let down too much and there's only certain people who I can fully trust with my confessions. I ...

Your words and story moved me so deep and changed my way of viewing my life. I've been so deflated my whole life and have given up. I feel like ...