Salutations.
The previous review was absolutely exhausting, so I hope you don't mind if I leave out the technicalities, such as spelling or language errors. There are two complete seasons to review, and I see you have already begun your third, so they will mostly be focussed on plot elements, though you will have to forgive me if I briefly indulge in critiquing the other aspects as well.
The previous chapter/episode had been rather short, but I had thought of it as a prologue of sorts. However, this chapter seems to be of equally short length, and I think that it should actually be a part of the first chapter/episode, since both deal with the creation of something - a world, in chapter/episode one, and civilisation, in chapter/episode two. Obviously, you won't be making changes as drastic as that now but it would be prudent to consider my advice while writing future chapters/episodes.
Furthermore, I just realised something: weren't Zekrom and Reshiram one being once, but when there was conflict in Unova the being split up into two? I have also noticed that Kyurem has not been mentioned yet. I suppose he will appear later...
There is another thing which I do not understand - Zekrom's desire to hide himself from the world. Why would he want to do this? I have literally never heard of a Legendary Pokémon dying due to age, though I do know some of them can die, so why would he want to isolate himself from his creations? In addition, Zekrom is supposed to represent Ideals, but at the moment, he seems to encourage anarchy. There is order in the world for a reason, and if everyone simply did whatever they wanted, chaos would ensue; poverty would most certainly not be restricted to only a couple of individuals, and nobody would co-exist peacefully. I understand that Zekrom desires an ideal world, but in order for that to be achieved, certain types of behaviour would be encouraged, whereas others would be discouraged and even punished.
When further exploring the last thought I have mentioned in the above paragraph, I also realised that Dark and Ghost type Pokémon have no place in an ideal world, because in an ideal world, nobody would die, everybody would be kind and friendly, and everyone would be happy. Yet the Dark and Ghost types do exist, which leads to the question of who created them?
Hopefully these questions will be answered in future chapters/episodes, but in the event they are not, I would advise addressing them.
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