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Overall, this is a very good poem. For the most part, the fluency is pretty good. The stanzas are very clear. The punctuation was constant, which is very good. I ...

I love how much anger there was right from the beginning. It is a very lively piece. It has so much personality and expression, which is one of the most ...

"When I can't even find the difference between dreams and reality?" I love this line. I just love it as it is and all that it represents. People seem to ...

"There was a couple of bean bags and crates..." I think that you meant: There *were a couple of bean bags... I liked how she referred to herself as "the ...

Corpse. Corps is like Peace Corps. Corpse is like a body. I love the emotion that you conveyed. "You wouldn't see much difference In this living corpse i wear." That ...

"The mysterious was of this all was that she appeared again recently." I think that you meant mystery, not mysterious. This was very interesting indeed. I know that it was ...

I am sad that this is the first poem that you have written for yourself. You are clearly a talented writer, and you have waited far too long. This is ...

"No one in that little prairie town it coming." I think that you meant: No one in that little prairie town *saw it coming. "I am much mightier then those ...

"I didn't knew." *know That mistake was repeated many times. You definitely should fix that, unless it is a stylistic choice. Either way, to me, it is very off putting. ...

"I can't say I loved her, but I cared for her a lot." I can't *that I loved her, but I cared for her a lot. I think that from ...

Personally, this is my opinion, and you don't have to listen. If you think that you will be offended, you don't even have to read. This is my opinion. It ...

I must applaud you for your use of sensory language. I also enjoyed how the protagonist brought the story to life. We really get a good sense of who she ...

I love your poetry. They are beautifully written. They convey clear messages, and have an excellent fluency. Why Do You I found that to be extremely relatable. I am not ...

Sorry, before i say the positives i must say this. 18+? Really? I honestly don't think that that is necessary. It wasn't very graphic, so i think that maybe 12+ ...

"I walk up to the barred hall and look through. A guard wearing..." That's just a paragraphing suggestion. They're wearing a tight ponytail? Sorry, i know that that is correct, ...