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Hey! Thank you so much for the reviews. I'm going to post the second/final part later tonight or tomorrow. Thanks again!

Thank you all so much for reading it and your suggestions. This is the first draft of the first part. What I'm gonna have happen next is Jon notices Rocky ...

A horrible, terrible, disgusting, although shameless bump so that people see the edit. Thanks for the comments! :):):)

I love this poem. Seriously, this is kickass. But, yeah, just change the paranthesis into italics. Excellent work!

Nothing I can add on to what others have already said. Very powerful poem.

Thanks a lot for the comments! They are unique, Though they see the bleak Reflected scenery. Sounds a lot better than what I have. Yeah, a lot of em were ...

Good stuff. I know how ya feel :/

Thanks a lot for the feedback!

I got a tad confused while reading this, although it's a good story. And man! I wish it were a hot summer day, but it's snowing outside....:(

Holy crap! (Is that a curse? I don't know). These are great! I love the last couple of verses. This is frekain' excellent.

It's better than I could...which isn't exactly saying much...It's grrrreat!

Thanks for the comments! I see what you mean about the "Days pass..." part. It is a bit odd. This was jsut some random story I wrote. I'm not really ...

Just one reply...please...I post feedback. Please? Just one comment? Is it good, or is it crap? Please, let me know.

It's good, although it does seems a little rushed at the end. Keep writing it! I need my fix!

Thanks! I just really wasn't sure if it was worth it to edit it before, but I definately will spend the next week or two doing that. It does need ...