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Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Literature
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose: Ch.V: Path of a Country 1
Heya Mailice! I only have a short review for this chapter, but I like the break in style from the previous chapters. You never let one style take over the ...
May 21, 2021
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Hello felistia! I haven't reviewed any of your works yet so I thought I'd stop by :D First off, in all the chapters I've read so far, your description is ...
May 6, 2021
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the u-haul driver honks the horn of his truck, ripping me from the memories that float in the dust. This line immediately hooked me in! "Memories that float in the ...
May 5, 2021
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Hello! This is such a cool poem, and I love how you personified sunshine and rain! "A sprinkle of heartbreak and a / light precipitation of sorrow" is my favorite ...
May 2, 2021
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Hi zekcede! I've been reading your pieces but I haven't reviewed one yet, so I thought I'd take some time to do that :) The rain falls, And I do ...
Apr 24, 2021
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Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Literature
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose: Ch. IV: The Town in No Mans Land 3
Hi Mailice! "So, calm? Are you glad to be rid of me?" he joked. The first question doesn't make sense to me because I'm not sure if he's asking if ...
Apr 23, 2021
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Hi NivedaJames! This poem really stood out to me for its descriptions and questions, and I loved the ending idea of "sleep[ing] forever in eternal bliss". I especially liked your ...
Apr 13, 2021
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Yesn't and Noes With all sincerity, this is my absolute favorite line^ I actually really liked the transition between the first and second stanza, and "stars starring / staring at ...
Apr 12, 2021
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Heya! (am I putting off homework to read more? Of course I am! ;)) This is very different from your original first chapter, and while I liked both, Léonard's character ...
Apr 11, 2021
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Hi ForeverYoung! You did a really great job with this sonnet, and I feel like your poetry has come so far already! I loved the repetition of "a flower shines" ...
Apr 11, 2021
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Hi BlueGlow! You have a wonderful inclination for storytelling and prose, so I wanted to leave a quick suggestion. Technically the definition of "poetry" these days is very fluid; all ...
Apr 5, 2021
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Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Literature
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose: Ch. IV: The Town in No Mans Land 2
Hi Mailice! This story is starting to take a very interesting turn... I no longer know what's going to happen next, and I don't even know who to trust except ...
Apr 5, 2021
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Hi @MapleWay and @starlitmind! I'm just dropping by for a quick suggestion. The narrative of the poem is well done, but I think the metaphors could have been better presented ...
Mar 30, 2021
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Hi there! I see you are new to YWS, so welcome! :D These are just random toughts Dont take it as poetry if it's not poetry what is it??? I ...
Mar 29, 2021
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Hi Liminality! I just read up a bit about modern sonnets, so this should be fun to review! I'll start with structure: First off, I didn't notice the rhymes on ...
Mar 25, 2021
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