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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Colder Calypso

    Thanks for giving me that heads up. I'm glad I read this. It was dramatic and painful without over-doing it. I especially LOVED the last two stanzas. "The blood you ...

    Dec 7, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: I intended to kiss you.

    That dance had been special beyond measure. I expected I'd be alone all night, and I've got to admit that he caught me by surprise when he told me he ...

    Oct 10, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Reality

    I am not much of a poet myself, but I do say that this is amazing. You described things so effortlessly. I know it probably took a lot of rewriting, ...

    Jul 18, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Ode To....

    Haha! I got a laugh out of this. It's funny how it can be taken two ways. It was really serious at first, so I thought you were talking about ...

    Jul 17, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Kiss me in the rain, baby.

    I know I'm a little late, haha (I found this while looking at your portfolio), but wow . WOW. wow. wow . Okay, I think I'm overusing the word. :P ...

    Jul 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: God

    Wow , I love this piece. It really enlightened me. It brought tears to my eyes. A hand came from somewhere; Not above nor below me, Not from one side ...

    Jul 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Forever

    You had a perfect rhyme and beat, and at the same time, this piece captured my heart. This is exactly how I feel right now, wishing and hoping that me ...

    Jul 17, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: April

    Hi. Good morning/afternoon/night/whatever it may be, wherever you are. I really enjoyed this piece, but at the same time, I was lost. I liked it because it was very descriptive ...

    Jul 17, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re:

    I like this story. It's quite refreshing because most stories on here have people dying. Dx Although there isn't a plot or storyline (I call these kind of stories 'doodles'), ...

    Jul 15, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: sweet sixteen and never been kissed part one

    You described everything so well, that I could easily picture it in my mind. There's not much background information; it's an empty story. Sometimes I write like that just to ...

    Jul 14, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Dear Sergio.

    This was .. amazing. Although there wasn't any background information, I felt so into the story. It was clear, beautiful, and very descriptive. Broken hearts can be tough to write ...

    Jul 14, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: That's Hot.

    Wow, great twist! I never saw it coming. Your style is different, it's very real. It had a nice flow and pace, and I never once suspected that Dana was ...

    Jul 14, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The Swirl (Love is like ice cream... it melts eventually)

    This short story kept my interest and really portrayed an argument between a former couple. At times, though, I felt that there was too much dialogue. In fact, it was ...

    Jul 14, 2011


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